Nice character dx but your sentince steucture's a little choppy. You should diagram your CC again and clean it up. Is English your first language?
I have a Chaos Space Marine for consideration. Let me know if you have any input or anything else I should know. If needed, I wouldn't mind going Imperial otherwise. Personal Information: Name: Praesion Alias: The Adonis Age: Believed to be 583 years old, possibly more due to Warp time dilation Appearance: The Adonis is a being who is clad in smooth, almost chitinous set of warped power armour, completely onyx in colouration. His features are smooth, and an almost glossed quality can be seen upon his plate. His helm, once originally of the MK VII variety, has shifted and remolded itself within the realms of Chaos, so that it's visage is completely devoid of facial features, the lenses, and grill of the helmet replaced with a smooth, glassy surface. How The Adonis sees through this, is a wonder to those who consider it, yet, always, they report a clear recognition and glare if they draw his attention. His eyes may be hidden, but they are not lacking for ability. Height: 2.23 Meters (Outside of Armour) 2.3 Meters (In Armour) Weight: 758 lbs (Out of Armour) 1167 lbs (In armour) Warband: The Descending Talons - Mercenary group compromised of various traitor marines looking to sell their services to those who are willing to pay them. Organization is ad hoc, mostly made up upon cults of personality built within the war band. Devotion: Sworn Sword of The Dark Prince Weaponry and Equipment: Armour: The Adonis wears a warped version of Aquila pattern power armour, taken from his time spent in the service of The Imperium, remade to better suit his dedication to The Ruinous Powers. Aside from it's smooth surface, the armour bears a single sigil of Slaanesh upon it's left kneecap, and at times, the silhouette of a woman can be seen, displayed in bright pink, at various positions around the armour. Weapons: -Mark IV Ultra Pattern Bolter 6 x Sickle Magazines (25 Rounds) -Phaestos Pattern Hand Flamer 3 x Fuel Cannisters -Ingelldina-Pattern Power Sword The hum of the blade has, due to unseen reasons, taken upon a shifting tone as it powers up, that seems to never quite match the previous. -3 x Frag Grenades -1 x Krak Grenade Equipment: -The Azure Orb: Granted to him by the being who had hired him on for this task, this small item, perhaps the size of a small ball, will vibrate with an increased frequency as it approached that which it's warp signature is locked to. Within the halls of the hulk, this item, along with the name of a single ship, are the only means by which The Adonis can track his quarry. -Doom Siren: A Doom Siren is a close combat Sonic Weapon that is used by Noise Marines, along with vehicles and Daemon Engines that are dedicated to the service of Slaanesh, the Chaos God of pleasure and excess. The Doom Siren is fitted to the Chaos Space Marine's Power Armour with a complex arrangement of pipes and tubes around their helmets which can project short-ranged sonic attacks. These assaults are launched against opponents as they close with the Noise Marine during melee combat, and are usually powerful enough to kill or at least temporarily stun their target, allowing the attacker to quickly finish the foe off while they are stunned. Misc: -Inferno Rounds: Due to the nature of the hulk, and the importance of his safely recovering of the agreed target, The Adonis has been gifted by his patron with the sorcerous enchanting of bolt rounds. These psychically empowered shots will, in addition to detonating as all bolter rounds, let loose a burst of warp energy upon impact, igniting the target in a blaze of ruinous fire. -The Lady: Within the confines of his armour, The Adonis shares his life, flesh and soul, with a spirit that has been bound to his plate. This figure sooths his blackest rages, tempts him to higher experiences of pleasure, and rewards those actions that bring glory to She Who Thirsts. Though typically unseen to all but The Adonis himself, those around him might sometimes believe they have heard an echoing laugh of a woman, of seen the faint impression of a pinkish figure, curled around his armour, whispering into his ear. In a more practical manner, the being that haunts this suit projects an almost palpable aura of unease around the traitor astartes, as in rare occasions, shots sighted for the warrior, have turned in their path, veering off as if brushed aside by and unseen hand, blades miss their marks, and at times, a lesser fighter might feel their sight overloaded by a sudden sensory burst. Backstory Within the dark, chilled halls of the Space Hulk designated, Tomb of Madmen, there lies a prize sought after by a being who can recall when the ship surrounding it still sailed the stars. This lord of the Ruinous Four, hearing of the Hulk's recent resurfacing into the material plane, has seen his chance to go forth and claim that which he desires, and as such, has taken steps to acquiring it. Not wishing to reveal his own strength from the depths of the Eye of Terror, this being chooses instead to hire on an operative who will search the Hulk in his stead, to recover and return that which he has lost. This operative, is The Adonis, a silent warrior, who has been hired out from The Descending Talons war band. Bringing his own hand flamer, and power sword, the Astartes is further granted access to a Bolter and Inferno Rounds to better ensure the success of his mission, along with a strange artefact that will aid him in tracking down the target. With this, The Adonis will be inserted into the Hulk via sorcerous teleportation, and left to either survive the horrors of it's halls and succeed, or to perish in a forgotten grave, silent in the void of an uncaring galaxy.
Very nice CC Vanguard. I'd like a Guard character before we start but the Adonis is just too cool to say no to. You're in!
Starcaller, I just recruited my friend and he just so happens to want to be a guardsman. He'll have something up in about 30 minutes.
I'm the Guardsmen volunteer that was discussed. Name: Cpl. Curcio Jerralus Regiment: 334th Ares Marauders Rank: Corporal Height: 6'1 Weight: 199lbs Weapons: Hellgun, Cypra Mundi "Ironclaw" Shotgun Equipment: Stormtrooper Carapace armor, Imperial Guard Fatigues, Micro Bead, Respirator, Combat Knife, Imperial Infantryman's Uplifting Primer. History: Corporal Curcio Jerralus was a member of the 367th Ares Marauders, and was re-assigned to the division about to embark into the bowls of the Space Hulk
Fairly short but simple and straightforward. I would like to know alittle more about corporal Jerralus however. What kind of man he is, how old he is, what he thinks of so many powerful people, etc. Also are Storm Troopers actually part of the Imperial Guard? I thought they were all trained at the Schola Progenium like Commissars and were a seperate branch of the imperial armed forces?
Storm Troopers are part of the Astra Militarum though they are trained by the Schola Progenium and are considered in doctrine to be super heavy infantry. In fact, there's even entire army divisions that are reserved for being Storm Troopers only but they follow the regular Tactica command and despite being glory boys are not independent like Commissars are. Also, squad status is here. Three Fireteams: Primarius, Secundus, and Tertius along with an independent Naval Commissar attachment. https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1sGltqc8pixib9ZTXLFnglWMwNrME-_yRQdiCLF_Y_PA/edit?usp=sharing These men and women will be the Imperial Navy retinue that is under my direct command and follow generic table-top stats except for wounds since Naval Armsmen are tougher than regular guardsmen. The "Boarding Shield" is considered a power weapon in close combat and covers the entire front of the infantryman with a slit for the weapon.
Hwy man, if you can keep track of all your guys and turn any dice rolls you might make into entertaining writing to recount their fate I liik forward to them going the way of the marines in Aliens... Or the marines from the science vessel cutscene in Starcraft. Who remembers that one lol?
